PLEASE HELP ME PEOPLE! Can You Please RATE My Lyrics Out Of 10 and Edit it a little bit? I really ne

This is my Frist Song and Im 14 please Edit and Rate:

Girl I need you Day and Night

Lifes Not The Same Without You

Everything would go Alright

As Long as You were By My Side

We%26#039;ll always be more than friends

I need you here until the end

You will always Be in my heart

They will never be apart

Your Eyes have me lost (Lost)

Stealing my heart (Heart)

I have my fingers Crossed

You would take my last breath (Breath)

Your Eyes have me lost (Lost)

Stealing my heart (Heart)

I have my fingers Crossed

You would take my last breath (Breath)

You are just mine (Mine)

Others say im dishonest

Can I hold you for one last time

I swear I wont break a promise (Promise)

Now, I sit on the Phone

Asking for you to come back home

What do I gotta do

To start something new

Girl I need you, and its true

When I see You, My heart blows away

This is nothing new

I really want you so I pray

PLEASE HELP ME PEOPLE! Can You Please RATE My Lyrics Out Of 10 and Edit it a little bit? I really need help.?

i absolutely LOVE it. it%26#039;s an awesome song. considering your still 14. you can go a long way. i wouldn%26#039;t change it. :) but maybe for each one. you shouldn%26#039;t repeat it. like the stuff in the paraphrases! but it%26#039;s your choice.

ONLY KEEP THIS:

Girl I need you Day and Night

Lifes Not The Same Without You

Everything would go Alright

As Long as You were By My Side

We%26#039;ll always be more than friends

I need you here until the end

You will always Be in my heart

They will never be apart

Your Eyes have me lost (Lost)

Stealing my heart (Heart)

I have my fingers Crossed

You would take my last breath (Breath)

Your Eyes have me lost (Lost)

Stealing my heart (Heart)

I have my fingers Crossed

You would take my last breath (Breath)

You are just mine (Mine)

Others say im dishonest

Can I hold you for one last time

I swear I wont break a promise (Promise)

Now, I sit on the Phone

Asking for you to come back home

What do I gotta do

To start something new

Girl I need you, and its true

When I see You, My heart blows away

This is nothing new

I really want you so I pray

don%26#039;t write it longer :)

PLEASE HELP ME PEOPLE! Can You Please RATE My Lyrics Out Of 10 and Edit it a little bit? I really need help.?

I really like it. It sounds like a really good ballad. Add a piano and refine is a little and you%26#039;ve got it. All you have to do is shorten it and repeat the chorus a little less! Great job!

PLEASE HELP ME PEOPLE! Can You Please RATE My Lyrics Out Of 10 and Edit it a little bit? I really need help.?

-5 too long to read

PLEASE HELP ME PEOPLE! Can You Please RATE My Lyrics Out Of 10 and Edit it a little bit? I really need help.?

The lyrics are good, cant rate the song without the beat though.

PLEASE HELP ME PEOPLE! Can You Please RATE My Lyrics Out Of 10 and Edit it a little bit? I really need help.?

yo it socks its so emo you gotta be like this son

%26quot;im the illest alive watch me prove it i%26#039;ll snatch ya crown wit ya head still attached to it%26quot;

PLEASE HELP ME PEOPLE! Can You Please RATE My Lyrics Out Of 10 and Edit it a little bit? I really need help.?

thats so sweet!!

good

PLEASE HELP ME PEOPLE! Can You Please RATE My Lyrics Out Of 10 and Edit it a little bit? I really need help.?

I think that it is VERY good, but it is a bit too long, try to shorten it by not repeating your self. Good luck, keep up the good work ;-)