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Thursday, June 17, 2010

PLEASE HELP ME PEOPLE! Can You Please RATE My Lyrics Out Of 10 and Edit it a little bit? I really ne

This is my Frist Song and Im 14 please Edit and Rate:



Girl I need you Day and Night



Lifes Not The Same Without You



Everything would go Alright



As Long as You were By My Side



We%26#039;ll always be more than friends



I need you here until the end



You will always Be in my heart



They will never be apart



Your Eyes have me lost (Lost)



Stealing my heart (Heart)



I have my fingers Crossed



You would take my last breath (Breath)



Your Eyes have me lost (Lost)



Stealing my heart (Heart)



I have my fingers Crossed



You would take my last breath (Breath)



You are just mine (Mine)



Others say im dishonest



Can I hold you for one last time



I swear I wont break a promise (Promise)



Now, I sit on the Phone



Asking for you to come back home



What do I gotta do



To start something new



Girl I need you, and its true



When I see You, My heart blows away



This is nothing new



I really want you so I pray



PLEASE HELP ME PEOPLE! Can You Please RATE My Lyrics Out Of 10 and Edit it a little bit? I really need help.?

i absolutely LOVE it. it%26#039;s an awesome song. considering your still 14. you can go a long way. i wouldn%26#039;t change it. :) but maybe for each one. you shouldn%26#039;t repeat it. like the stuff in the paraphrases! but it%26#039;s your choice.



ONLY KEEP THIS:



Girl I need you Day and Night



Lifes Not The Same Without You



Everything would go Alright



As Long as You were By My Side



We%26#039;ll always be more than friends



I need you here until the end



You will always Be in my heart



They will never be apart



Your Eyes have me lost (Lost)



Stealing my heart (Heart)



I have my fingers Crossed



You would take my last breath (Breath)



Your Eyes have me lost (Lost)



Stealing my heart (Heart)



I have my fingers Crossed



You would take my last breath (Breath)



You are just mine (Mine)



Others say im dishonest



Can I hold you for one last time



I swear I wont break a promise (Promise)



Now, I sit on the Phone



Asking for you to come back home



What do I gotta do



To start something new



Girl I need you, and its true



When I see You, My heart blows away



This is nothing new



I really want you so I pray



don%26#039;t write it longer :)



PLEASE HELP ME PEOPLE! Can You Please RATE My Lyrics Out Of 10 and Edit it a little bit? I really need help.?

I really like it. It sounds like a really good ballad. Add a piano and refine is a little and you%26#039;ve got it. All you have to do is shorten it and repeat the chorus a little less! Great job!



PLEASE HELP ME PEOPLE! Can You Please RATE My Lyrics Out Of 10 and Edit it a little bit? I really need help.?

-5 too long to read



PLEASE HELP ME PEOPLE! Can You Please RATE My Lyrics Out Of 10 and Edit it a little bit? I really need help.?

The lyrics are good, cant rate the song without the beat though.



PLEASE HELP ME PEOPLE! Can You Please RATE My Lyrics Out Of 10 and Edit it a little bit? I really need help.?

yo it socks its so emo you gotta be like this son



%26quot;im the illest alive watch me prove it i%26#039;ll snatch ya crown wit ya head still attached to it%26quot;



PLEASE HELP ME PEOPLE! Can You Please RATE My Lyrics Out Of 10 and Edit it a little bit? I really need help.?

thats so sweet!!



good



PLEASE HELP ME PEOPLE! Can You Please RATE My Lyrics Out Of 10 and Edit it a little bit? I really need help.?

I think that it is VERY good, but it is a bit too long, try to shorten it by not repeating your self. Good luck, keep up the good work ;-)

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