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hi there ..

the poetry.com refused to publish my poem for the second time .. i really donno what to do .. i got so despaired ..

plz help me to improve my poem and rate it 4 me ..

there is a sample of it

Brother

I can feel your blood

Flowing in my heart,

I can hear your breath

Moving in my lungs,

I can see your tears

Running down my face,

My life without you

Is an empty place,

Because your land is my land,

Because your blood is my blood,

And your soul is my soul,

Cause we all are one hand,

When you cry

I feel your pain,

When you are wounded

I bleed again,

When you feel happy

I fly high,

When you succeed

I can touch the sky.

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Hope this helps

My Brother

I can feel your blood

Flowing through my heart,

I can hear your breath

Moving in my lungs,

I can see your tears

Running down my face,

My life without you

Is an empty place,

Your blood is my blood,

And your soul is my soul,

Because we fall from the same tree

We together grow bold

When you cry

I feel your pain,

When you are wounded

My wounds bleed again,

When you feel happy

I also fly high,

When you succeed

I feel I can touch the sky.

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i like it!

i dont know y they woundt except it!

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from one to 10 a 7 and a star.

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The second paragraph needs to be removed.

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omg. i love it honestly i cant think of what could make it better.

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it%26#039;s nice but try ryming every other line the last word

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Not bad at all

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Sorry but that is cheesy and the words are too simple too.

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I give it a 10!!! I loved it, It%26#039;s hard for me to believe you were rejected. ...I think you%26#039;re just bragging....=]

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i think its good, but there a lot similar i%26#039;m afriad so its not very unique or special

how bout , cause together we are one

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I%26#039;m not an expert or anything, but i thought it was really nice...if this is just a sample i wonder what the rest of it is like...Maybe try another site to publish it..Good Luck

on a scale of 10 i would rate it a 9.5..only cuz the last sentence in 2nd paragraph don%26#039;t make sense..

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i suggest you get ru-paul opinion on that one.

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i think u should change the 2 paragraph otherwise its good were did u get the idea from

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read alot of poems very similar needs to be more origanal

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8....i do not like the %26quot;i can see your tears running down my face%26quot; part i love the last verse....very deep, very deep閳?br>Please rate my poem?

Well, I%26#039;m a poet myself and I have poetry on there. But I see no point to your poem. You repet things in it, which can make it boring. It%26#039;s a little depressing. It%26#039;s not, oh I don%26#039;t know, clear enough. Rewrite it, but this time, wright with your heart. It seems like you sat down and thought about it.

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Between a 1-10 ratio i would give it a nine its outstanding it%26#039;s really a touching poem!!

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i think its good 7/10

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I liked it! Why won%26#039;t they accept it?! People are weired!

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pretty good. just write and keep writing. never censor yourself or do what you think %26quot;THEY%26quot; would like. success is only success by your standards.

peace!

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sounds good to me...means you feel what your brother is feeling or others

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I like it, though it%26#039;s simple, conveys a very nice message. Maybe its simplicity it%26#039;s the best quality it has. I give you a star.

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that waz beautiful i never heard such poetry bravo brava write another one im cryin over here

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It%26#039;s v. good. I%26#039;m no English boffin or expert, but appeals to the imagination and the 1st paragraph evokes a great deal of emotion within me. It%26#039;s good as the words you use have powerful effect such as %26quot;I can hear your breath, moving in my lungs%26quot;. I can relate to it too, cos my brother%26#039;s always had a messed up life. All the best!

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What is the message you want to tell using this poem? For me it is just a collection of sentences that explain the same thing. Specify why you fell that way, what you to do for him because you feel that way, . . .

I would give it a 4 out of 10.

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just bcuz its a poem, dsnt mean it HAS 2 ryme, it just needs 2 have feeling and the right words, dont try to follow sm1s path, meke ur own. it has to b how u feel, not how u r told 2 feel.

(like if sm1 starts a FASHIO (yuk) that dsnt mean U have 2 follo it,u can, but its ur chois) try puting in ur thoughts and feelings like, wn u bleed, i thingk %26quot;why?%26quot; or smthng like that. it needs 2 b U and how U feel.

if u want i can send u sm of my poems so u understand wat i mean, just send me and email.

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it sucks omg i am a auther of songs and that sucks!!!!! take out the second line wait take out all the lines 1 to 10 i rate it 0

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its awesome!!!!!!!!

love it!!!!!

Rate 10

hillary

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you just reminded me of how I loved older brother May he rest in peace.

ah. beautifull.

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The heart is there, But I don%26#039;t Feel what it is your Trying to put out, where is the emotion It also seems a little Emotionless. aren%26#039;t poems supposed to GRAB!! you. you have a good start now make it smack me in the kisser

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It%26#039;s crap, boring and depressing. Write something that people will enjoy reading instead.

%26quot;Roses are red,

Violets are blue.

Give up on poetry,

It ain%26#039;t for you!%26quot;