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hi ,

poetry.com already rejected my poem for the second time , i got so upset .. donno what to do .. may be it was a wrong idea to leave my mother tongue language ( Arabic ) and trying writing in English .

plz rate my poem and help me improving it .. and here it is :

Brother

I can feel your blood

Flowing in my heart,

I can hear your breath

Moving in my lungs,

I can see your tears

Running down my face,

My life without you

Is an empty place,

Because your land is my land,

Because your blood is my blood,

And your soul is my soul,

Cause we all are one hand,

When you cry

I feel your pain,

When you are wounded

I bleed again,

When you feel happy

I fly high,

When you succeed

I can touch the sky.

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an amazingly good poem...shame on poetry.com for rejecting it. its intense and has vivid emotions. when i read this poem...i thought, %26quot;maybe writing in English is his strength.%26quot; i rate this a 10/10. just turn down the intensity level becasue this poem is too strong...maybe thats y it was rejected. but i still love it!!!!!

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Nice.

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Honestly, I thought it was good! I am usually VERY picky with poems, but I really liked yours!! Good luck with getting it submitted!

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give you an 8 /10! ....and a star!!!!

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Very touching. I wish I had a brother like you.

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I don%26#039;t know , it%26#039;s creepy. But it sounds good

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8/10 good job!

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quite good, little gay but good, chicks love poetry, teach me obi wan

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I give it a 8. Its good but i just dont feel it you know?

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awesome

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very good 9/10

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That is very good. I think the only change I would recommend is instead of %26quot;I can hear your breath%26quot; you should say %26quot;I can feel you breath%26quot; moving in my lungs. You are talking about movement. Or find another word to describe the feelings in the lungs. Nice job! !

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I loved the poem, don%26#039;t let poetry.com keep you from writting...in either language. 10

I like to post my poems on poemhunter.com its a free site you can post on and recieve comments about your work. Keep up the good work!

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I am a member of a poetry website and I love reading poems. I think the poem is ok. I personally liked the first stanza the most. The rest seemed a little forced versus the first stanza that really set the tone, however, I just don%26#039;t feel the ending was as powerful as your opening stanza. Work on the ending and it will be that much better... Good luck

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nice poem. GO ahead with more beautiful poems.

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I liked it

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Its good but there isn%26#039;t anything memorable about it. It kind of sounds a bit cliche.

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I think it%26#039;s great! its a great poem for all the brothers/husbands/fathers serving our country! keep it going

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You have asked this same question to rate the same poem.

Why are you repeating this same thing, same questions

is it fun for you ?