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Wednesday, October 28, 2009

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Ok i have another one for readers to rate...sorry im in a writing frenzy!! 5 for best 1 worst...and explain what i could impove (if needed)



What is love?



Staring out the window,



A soft hand touches my face,



He whispers soft words,and my heart begins to race,



I look over at the mist dripping down,



And watch as it drops to the ground,



Happy thoughts begin to form,



As a tear rolls down my cheek,



The words in his eyes, louder than if spoken,



He wonders why I cry,



I say to him with most passion,



I%26#039;m happy, I have you by my side.



If love is so grand, love is so great,



Why does God make us wait,Is it to make us strong?



To know what%26#039;s is right from wrong?I%26#039;ll tell you why,



It%26#039;s so we know what love is.



When you can look at your lover,that one soul mate,



And lift the world, and carry it%26#039;s wieght,



When you can truely say,You have no clue,



As to why you love them, You just do.



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that...is...beautiful! i give it a full on FIVE 555555! if it were possible and u asked for it, i would go up to ten!



dude, i%26#039;m listening to Cute is What we aim for%26#039;s Curse of Curves right now, %26amp; when i was reading this, everything went away....



i luv it. i luv writing...reading... and i luv this poem. beautiful.



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I think it%26#039;s pretty good.



3, the meter needs some work.



The rhythm of it.



Nice work:)



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very nice!



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omg! this poem is so beautiful.....ur expression is incredible. u r relly truly talented..i give this poem 5 outta 5 ...it sure deserves it...i like the way u make ur word flow....truly inspirational [if u can call it tht]

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