All Alone, But With Company
I cry at night,
I put up a fight.
Stuck going forwards,
But forever going backwards,
My head fills with all the %26#039;shoulds%26#039; and %26#039;coulds%26#039;.
On my own,
Once again,
On my own,
I%26#039;ll count to ten.
1,2,3,4 I%26#039;ll carry on counting forever more.
5,6,7,8 Lonliness is my only fate.
9,10 And I%26#039;ll lie down in my den.
They try their hardest,
Try to run the fastest.
Jaded in backwards mode,
Forever alone.
Stuck in the middle,
Out comes a little giggle.
On my own,
Once again.
On my own,
I%26#039;ll count to ten.
1,2,3,4 Skip some more.
5,6,7,8 And I%26#039;ll arrive late.
9,10 You%26#039;ll know when.
All alone,
My heart left unsewn.
Thrown in the cold,
No longer bold.
The cold grasping at my skin,
The one treasure in my life, a ring.
On my own,
Once again.
On my own,
I%26#039;ll count to ten.
1,2,3,4 I%26#039;ll fall to the floor.
5,6,7,8 I can see a gold, shining gate.
9,10 Here to join all my fellow women...
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Rate my poem? And please be honest. I%26#039;m 11 incase you wanted to know...?
I think it was very good one for your age. I would score as 9, but I am a little conserned because it sounds very depressing for a girl of 11 years old.
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I can%26#039;t rate it on a scale of 10, but it is pretty good. The numbers in it make me think it could easily be turned into a song as well. I was surprised by the quality, because of your age, but I think it%26#039;s good.
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pretty good...9/10. by the way, telling ppl ur 11 doesn%26#039;t strengthen ur poem at all. u just want pity and a low expectation so ur poem seems that much better, but honestly you%26#039;re good enough that you don%26#039;t need to do that.
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Very good for your age but you sound very depressed i would keep writing poems but also talk to someone, i would give it a 9 or 10. if this is your passion keep doing it.
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Definte potiential,keep it up!!!!
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Kinda depressing...is something wrong?? very good though and keep it up! you could be awesome someday!!!
try to be happier! you%26#039;ll be fine!!
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i thought it was good. but i wouldn%26#039;t repeat some of my words as much but very good and i give u a 10 +!
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