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K so this poem is about one of my ex boyfriend

Rate this poem 1-10

and tell me what you like about it

a little critism never hurt

so be honest

The Friend I Never Had

I told you my secret

You told me your lies

I gave you my heart

But you put on a disguise

I thought I could trust you

I thought you were my friend

Instead you made mistakes

You said it would never happen again

But now the bond is broken

The trust can never be repaired

You leave me feeling a little sad

But now it閳ユ獨 time to say goodbye to the friend

I never had

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wow, good job

it%26#039;s perfect!!! 10.5

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Wow, did you really write this? It%26#039;s really good, 10+! :)

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I Actually really like it

10++++

You should like make a poetry book or something.

Haha.

And I thought MY poems were good.

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The rhyme sorta sucks... it doesn%26#039;t flow.

3/10

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100000000000000000000000000000000000000! Oh wait, 1-10.....10!!!!!! duh! u hav great talent!

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2. Kinda silly, really.

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thats really good =)

did you really write that?

10 for sure

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I%26#039;LL GIVE A 10, THAT WAS REAL GOOD!!

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I like it!!

I%26#039;ll give it a 9.5, try and put some more emotion into it if you can

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i love it. it has so much feeling to it :]

10+++++++++++++++++++++

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i rate it a 8.5 out of ten, and the only part i didn%26#039;t like was the third to last like- you leave me feeling a little sad, but besides that is was really good.

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10!!!

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o thts good! i%26#039;d give it a 8.9

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rated 10000000000

i love it!

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i like it i give it a 7. i would have used more appealing words though. it has great emotion but it%26#039;s not being expressed to it%26#039;s maximum.

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I give it a big 10!!!! I love it.. so raw and deep!

However.. two of the sentences with %26quot;But...%26#039; are not working for me. Those sentences would flow better without a %26quot;but%26quot;

I gave you my heart

**You put on a disguise

You leave me feeling a little sad (would also sound better without %26quot;a little%26quot;)

Now it閳ユ獨 time to say goodbye to the friend

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I%26#039;d give it about a 6.5. It%26#039;s pretty good, but there%26#039;s really no rhythm to the words, and the words are rather simple. I%26#039;d try to get a steady rhythm of syllables going, it would sound better. I like the last two lines.

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i dont believe YOU wrote that..but if u did... 8...

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i like it....10

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How about an 8+, your headed in the right direction but the rhythm is lost at line four. Try, %26quot;but you were in disguise%26quot;. Line 6 Try, %26quot;that you were my friend%26quot;. Sometimes you need to shorten the line to keep it moving. Now that you have the idea I%26#039;ll let you work on it some more. I think with a little work you will have a 10.

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so your fourteen. get real feelings your too immature and stupid now.