Rate my poem!!?

As I touch thy soft tender lips,

I feel as soft roses,

have laid up my lips.

When you embrance me,

in thy( or thine, not sure)

I feel warm,

In my heart, I feel secure.

When I look into thy deep,

blue,

eyes I feel as if I am in an ocean,

of thy deep love.

------------

rate 1-10:)

Rate my poem!!?

Needs to be polished and reposted. Keep-em coming...

Rate my poem!!?

It is very soothing.

you should use thy.

id give it a ten

Rate my poem!!?

A give it a 3, but keep working at it

Rate my poem!!?

i give it a 4. it needs to be reworked a little more so that it i%26#039;ll flow better.

peace

Rate my poem!!?

What%26#039;s with the thy%26#039;s and thines? Are you living in ancient Babylonia? I liked it other wise, just stick to simple pronouns.

Rate my poem!!?

i hardly read poetry.. but this one is good .. it kinda stops abruptly... or leaves alot more to be desired...

i would give it a 5 or 6

Rate my poem!!?

Im not really in2 poems like thy %26amp; stuff but this oncez pretty good...i really feel the emotion %26amp; stuff got really good detail...i%26#039;d love to here the rest ill give it a 5-6